"Sonnet 88" Would you be waylaid from your path? Care to C/C?

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Sonnet 88

Beyond these reefs and far away yonder,
Awaits my love, so distant yet so nigh,
And often in her arms my thoughts wander,
A thousand miles ahead as crows would fly;
Wish I if only I could scroll the skies,
As I would to a moving dome direct,
To where directly down below she lies,
I might a fair weather for her select;
But stars arrayed to try divine her fate,
As dreamers do when reading destiny,
The writings for my life have seemed so late,
For only now is there mention of me;
……..But though the crows leave no footprints to lead,
……..My heart would always know the path to tread.



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Answer 1

Your sonnets are like magic...

They paint fantastical scenarios which

swim through the mind, and set to flames

that which cannot be dampened...

Answer 2

Atmospheric in its imagery,

well placed phrasing gives this sonnet

a relaxed, gentle flow.

The final couplet doesn't rhyme.

The use of lead in present tense rhymes

with tree, be, me...etc.

Tread rhymes with bed, dead, said, etc.

You might want to rethink this couplet on

an otherwise beautifully composed sonnet.

Answer 3

Great line to close the 3rd stanza.



Good sonnet.

Answer 4

Wow. This reminds me of Elizabeth Browning!

Answer 5

Your sonnet has potential. Your iambic pentameter is pretty good; you're getting there. Good flow.

Interesting subject matter. I especially like lines 5-7; they are original.

Answer 6

No, I never stray..

Nice format,good story.

Overall it's fine.

bye.

Answer 7

You write great romantic poetry.

Answer 8

Well I thought of 'In No Strange Land '' this poem does not need much comment just it's Beautiful



And Thanks for posting.. :)

Answer 9

Sir Questor



Love trumps all. Your path will not be waylaid. Your sonnets remain

a mainstay here on YAPS.



Congrats sire

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