(Princess of Bright) - new poem, c/c if you may?

Question

Princess of Bright

Aerial was that friction match and I,
beguiled by her beaming glare, luminous,
Glorious amid red rose beds, flowery,
Radiant of her young Springs and vows!

Dazzling and glistening the air around
with bees to seethe in redemptive light,
a sprite! Was I the blessed unsound,
a mere mortal! Lurid but unfit, albeit!

And then, like an aeriform, descended
to fill my emptiness, ascetic severeness;
acceptable Wed scent, well respected,
my openhearted vacancy, and nothingness.

Princess of Bright, lucent, deplorable,
aloof! A nonadjacent mistress, in Utopia,
to navigate in venial dreams lamentable,
to gloss her undimmed glimmer in sepia.

Aphotic my nights became in dismal tear,
as virtuous she was, to forge my dream,
Unfavorable of a Groom I was, to bear,
my Acheronian wick, angelic waxy grim.

There she was! Benighted in brunet yon,
her mane to wave in ethereal fine visions,
Princess of Darkness, made me reckon,
Invisible, then was my trauma incision.

© G. V. - 01.23.2012 /
© 29570343

Answer 1

I think this is lovely. I especially like your word choices. The imagery is fanciful.

Answer 2

Princess of Light come in and shine

Bring more light into my life...

The gloom should be gone

And my mind should grow strong

There's so much uncertainty around here

And I feel I could faint as time draws near

I hear a calling deep down in my heart

Wondering when life will be torn apart...

I'm dizzy...

Answer 3

Gio



As one can see, man vs the angelic and spiritual realm

can be quite traumatic, illuminating and transforming.



I really do not see how you do it, ye of the brilliant mind,

there I do again, saying too many nice things will put

me in a rough spot with others, even though I try to

uplift all, it matters not, and that is my downfall.



A poem of enlightening beauty

Answer 4

You've been consuming too much baklava,this is quite sugary . Hmmmnnn,venial dreams,were they a little damp?HaHa

Answer 5

And the Muzak of poetry plays on, and on, and on..................



A shame really. Such a waste of time, effort and talent. Is it humour you are trying to write? If so it does make me smile....but not laugh.