KRUMP is my poem answer to the challenge you offered to give me help with, c/C?

Question

It was a losing battle for the natives of the land,
who knew that the final hour was at hand.
2012. Global warming was HOT!
Santa stopped mid-air over a portable pot
in the refugee camp housing 13.3 mil.
He dumped his load of gifts and stepped into the swill.
Large hungry eyes saw his reindeer and sleigh,
'Someone yelled, Kill them Before the get away!
They knocked over the portapotty on St Nick
Who was knocked unconcious while stll holding his prick.
The reindeer fled off into the jungle, scattered.
Santa came out with his nice red suit splattered
with a foul-smelling substance and a wounded ego.
"Now Dashur, Now Schmizzle, away we go!
To the suburbs in America, to the Taj Majal!
These kids aren't on my lists not at all!
But no reindeer came, no Rudolph's glow-nose.
The refugee children killed Santa for his clothes
and seing the size of his fleshy white rump
They cooked him up. Krisp Kringle and KRUMP
was remembered ever after as what ended the malaise:
Kingdom Radically Uplifted, Mighty Praise !

Answer 1

It is clever and funny throughout, but when you got to the cannibalism, it turned my stomach.



It is unique and you have great rhymes throughout, and good solid beat, so it has all of the elements of a good poem.



It's just the cannibalism; and killing Santa. It is a serious piece presented in a humorous way, a way of coping with the reality of the world with wars everywhere.



You did a great job and kept the politics of a situation like this out of it. It is a great satirical work, LC, it's just that darn cannibalism that ... oops ... I have to go puke.

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hugs,

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Answer 2

Santa would always have children on his list no matter where in the world he visit , the child coming out in me .

The refugee children killed Santa for his clothes, oh what have you done to poor Santa.

Children love Santa all over the world

Answer 3

Mighty Praise! LOL! Krisp Kringle and KRUMP get outta here!

Portapotty – foul smelling substance –poor Santa *** over and out!

Answer 4

This is by far a very different read for me. You're so mean for killing santa in some far off land.

I think America could have enjoyed him more. It also sounds like he used the whip on his good ol'pal reindeer a' one to many times. Quirky little read.

Answer 5

Did you no Santa always comes to England first , I read your challenge but I couldn't think of anything good.. your poems great you have a good Imagination :)

Answer 6

the "donner" party were famous cannibals. this was excellent and quickly written. one would suspect being willing to eat the jolly old elf would have earned a trip to the naughty list at least.

Answer 7

It goes "On Dashur, on Shizzle

On Trumpet and Fizzle

On Connor, and RuPaul

And Quagmire and Schmizzle..."



And some people find Santa hard to digest.



*bows to the artist*

Answer 8

Big smiles sis.



I haven't believe in a very long time, so his being eaten was OK by me. Especially for starving people. I'm sure.

Answer 9

Just don't show it to the kids who still believe in Santa Claus.

Answer 10

It's a laugh riot .YEHAWWW..I do have a sense of humor.

I cried from laughing so much,now my stomach hurts.

Cannibals..Awesome,Pizzle moi panzill.

His P*ick?Hope he was just peeing.

Not J.O...BYEEEXXX

Answer 11

You are becoming a new Kipling. Congrats. (My name is Giorgio)

Answer 12

You're crazy, I love it