What do you think of my poem? *Moonlight?

Question

Moonlights beam
Shiny, lingering clusters of light reflect
Causing the dark starless night
To glow and glitter. Although
She's alone -- feel its presence on my skin,
Tingling ... softly brushing me.
-Pulling my emotions back and forth; pulling tides-
Far away, its beauty illuminates,
... Yet too close, its rough, untouchable surface appears.
Lovely facade d i s a p e a r s . . .
Unrealistic imagery of perfection fades away; replaced
With craters of flaws. But yet still,
Deepest desire?
Fly to the majestic Luna, cross my heart
Stay there eternally forever,

*the comma at the end is on purpose and the poems not really about the moon lol

Answer 1

I like it :) You use few words (unlike me), but still put your point across in a beautiful light. I love poetry like this, that can make someone read it and see things from a new perspective. Awesome :) Keep writing! <3

Answer 2

I really like it..

and I like how put character into ur poem ny having spaces between the disapear.. and so forth..

Good job :)

Answer 3

it's beautifull!!! though I don't understand the comma at the end and then of what is it?... may I ask?... well.. if you didn't say it already, the I guess not.. sorry:P

Answer 4

I can't tell where your inability to use grammar and spelling ends and where any poetic license is supposed to begin.

Answer 5

wow.........that's really really really really nice



i love it