What do you think of this poem?

Question

Nature:

Bees Buzzing around

Birds in the morning chirp aloud

Gentle water makes no sound.

Listen close, gather round

Turn that frown upside-down

Look at what you found….

The gentle sound of

Bees buzzing around.



Any feedback, or contructional criticism? Thanks, (:

Oh, and can you rate it to on a scale of 1-10...(:

Answer 1

This is good. I like the positivity coming from this poem. As simplistic as it is, it is very influential and I believe it can make many people's days better. Continue writing like this and maybe you'll publish something someday. :)

Answer 2

i REALLY do like it, because For one..U only used an A.A.A rhyme patterned which is hard to do and hard to impress with. And u used nature and I love nature. U did a really nice job I would say. I also like how u use no commas what so ever. And also used ur first sentence as the last line. Nice!



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Answer 3

i believe this is a very sensual poem. I love the fact that you have used the commas for the readers to pause a moment and read it with the life you intended for it to have.

Answer 4

you use nature as real life i love that you have good poetry hand doing poems is hard alot of people don't see that keep on going like that girl it's awesome :)