Question:
On Valentine's Day, should I send this poem to someone I like?
anonymous
2011-02-12 06:06:25 UTC
This woman and I have been friends for 5-6 years. There always seemed to be subtle signs of a mutual interest, but things have begun to pick up in the past couple months and those once subtle signs appear to be anything but. I sent her a gift on a random day not too terribly long ago and she responded by saying, "I have the biggest grin on my face," "I can't believe you remembered," "You're so sweet," "This goes to show how well you really know me" and "I was smiling and laughing so much, I almost cried." Neither one of us has really come forward with our feelings officially, although judging by both our words and actions, I would think it's safe to say we're both cognizant of the mutual feelings. I wrote a poem a few days ago and intended on sending it to her on Valentine's Day, but am tentative on the matter and wanted to hear what other people thought. Thus far, everyone to whom I've sent this has given me positive feedback and for the most part, believes I should send it, yet I've received rather contradictory responses from some, whom believe that while she will probably like it, it also has the potential to backfire.

Here's the poem (...and just for the record, the word "Nerdy" was placed in there as part of an inside joke. I can't tell you how often she refers to herself as such):

H appiness emanates from my core,
A rdent in feeling,
P ossessive of exquisite beauties you are,
P lentiful traits worthy of admiration,
Y ou behold,

V ersatile,
A lluring,
L ight-hearted,
E ndearing,
N erdy,
T antalizing,
I llustrious,
N imble,
E ffervescent,
S cintillating,

D iligent in providing you with smiles and laughter,
A rdent in bringing you joy,
Y our happiness emanates from my core.
Five answers:
Dominique
2011-02-12 06:53:49 UTC
I would write



"You are:" with a colon instead of "you behold,"



because the next lines describe her in a list.



I have a problem with "happiness radiates from my core".

Core makes me think of the part of an apple you throw away. And core charge- which is a ripoff.

Rhymes with gore. And chore. and bore.



Could you say simply

"happiness radiates" or happiness abundant or abounding--- that would refer to her.



Because does someone else's emotion radiate from ourselves, really?



Possessed instead of possessive-- "possessed of beauties you are "--- otherwise she is possessive of beauty. Which is weird.



After Scintillating, you can put a period. Full stop.



Because the next 3 lines refer to YOU.



diligent

ardent

yearning



I vote for yearning-- which is tender affection and heartfelt longing.



And if she doesn't get the picture-- grab her and kiss her like Rhett Butler kissed Scarlet.



And you have to come back here and tell us the results.
anonymous
2011-02-12 20:08:41 UTC
Hi ,



I have been with my girl for a few months now and I want to show her my love by getting her something really special for Valentine's Day.



I want to give her something different than just a card, chocolate or flowers as eveyone does that.



I have never been good with coming up ideas until one of my buddys gave me a link to an ebook which has some brilliant gift ideas.



Since getting it as it is free there are many gift ideas which I will be presenting to my girl on Valentines Day.



This is going to be so special.



If you guys have not got it sorted check the link in the resource box below and share it with your buddies so that we can all have that really Special romantiv Valentine's Day.



Happy Valentines.
anonymous
2011-02-12 19:42:51 UTC
Hi ,



I have been with my girl for a few months now and I want to show her my love by getting her something really special for Valentine's Day.



I want to give her something different than just a card, chocolate or flowers as eveyone does that.



I have never been good with coming up ideas until one of my buddys gave me a link to an ebook which has some brilliant gift ideas.



Since getting it as it is free there are many gift ideas which I will be presenting to my girl on Valentines Day.



This is going to be so special.



If you guys have not got it sorted check the link in the resource box below and share it with your buddies so that we can all have that really Special romantiv Valentine's Day.



Happy Valentines.
chris w
2011-02-12 15:34:58 UTC
The poem is a bit vague. It keeps things in limbo. Why not be more direct with telling her how you feel, then at least you'd be clear. If she shares your feelings, woweee. If not you get to have clarity. If she hasn't opened up so far, sending a general hint hint poem might not get her to do so either.
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2011-02-12 14:22:38 UTC
That would be a great idea! It would make her so happy! Everyone loves it when people write poems from them.


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