My friend "H" has got cancer. A poem. Your reactions?

Question

Have you ever been tipped the "black spot" big time?
Ever had your life stripped from under your feet?
With news so bad you can hardly believe,
Well, my friend "H" did, last Christmas Eve.

Oh, Mr "H",I'm afraid it's bad news,
The C.A.T.scan has never been wrong,
Your oesophagus and your livers' gone queer,
With luck, you'll maybe see out a whole year.

We'll be starting the "chemo" this very next week,
We'll give you the best that we can,
But with statistics against you, I very much fear,
You'll be lucky to see out this coming year.

Now "H" is a strange one, of that their's no doubt,
He won't take f... all lying down,
Give him a chance , for he's made it quite clear,
He's determined to see out this coming year.

Now whether he does, or whether he don't,
At the moment we really can't tell,
Nothing is certain and nothing is clear,
Dear Lord, let him see out this coming year.

Answer 1

awe, i really liked that. very meaningful and inspirational. i felt sad but then it turned into more of a feeling of hope and faith that he is strong and can do it.. the repetition of the " see out this coming year" really makes it powerful... very nice poem, and all the best to your friend "h"

Answer 2

My brother just found out he has terminal cancer two weeks before Xmas. I would not want to give him a poem like this, but everyone has different personalities so this H person might like it. You know him better than us. My brother has a great sense of humor, but I really don't see any humor in it. All it basically says is that there isn't much hope for you, but let's hope for the best. I think I would try to come up with something more meaningful about surviving a battle with cancer.

Answer 3

Too much of 'see out this coming year.'

rather try something like these for the last one



It isnt clear whether he'll make it or not,

But all of us close to him are proud he's giving it a shot



Nothig is certain that we all know,

But we can be proud knowing he gave it a go



maybe add in another verse like:



Ive known H for so long and Ive become very close,

Which would explain why I understand this curse,

Although I wish with all my heart that this was a dream and not true,

I realise he's so special the Lord wants him too!

Answer 4

I understand the intentions behind the poem, or at least I think I do, but the rhyme-y ness of it makes it sound like Shel Silverstein or a limerick. The rhythm of the beginning of the poem makes it sound like you're making light of your friend's condition and I honestly couldn't tell whether you were concerned and scared for him or if you were making fun of him until the very last line of the poem.

Answer 5

Didn't read the poem, but here's a hint: One clove of garlic - taken in any form - has a 60% chance of curing cancer. If that doesn't work, try two. Simple. We don't know about this because there are laws preventing companies from patenting natural plants. If we all discovered that The-big-C can be cured by eating a simple plant, then just think how upset all the share-holders would become.



That's one clove a day until cured.

Answer 6

i really like it, its really personal too, my auntie died from cancer so it really hit home too, it actually made me cry :( on the last bit where it says now wheather he does, or wheather he dont, itll sound better as doesn't x

Answer 7

I dont think you should call mister H a queer just so you can rhyme with year.

Answer 8

Do NOT show your friend this poem. OMG