Night With An Angel.......My Poem!! How is it? Rate Please....?

Question

Here is a poem....how is it? how many marks will you give out of ten?

Among the thousand stars one night
Appeared a fairy, white in light
My eyes were clos'd but heart was wake
By chance, to feel her song of might

Nearer she came the singing sprite
Emptied her bough the owl in fright
Her beauty spread in air a light
The brook the paus'd to have a sight

The sky drizzled as if in bliss
A breeze then came and gave a kiss
She rais'd her hands and did a touch
The heart of heaven I felt in this

Within my thoughts a morn then born
I caught a sight of graveyard yon
To there I walk'd to know who sounds
I found a baby, newly born

Beside the grave I saw a scene
There lay on marsh an eartly queen
A gale then broke and took her 'way
To heights and heights I never had seen

Across my mind a scene then rode
A Kingless throne and crown it show'd
And people taking holy bath
In streams of grief that overflow'd

At once a star in earth had shone
I saw a fairy in that throne
A thousand stream of bliss then flow'd
Out of her heart to miles unknown.

Answer 1

Wow. This is beautiful. Very nice detail, almost movie script like. I'm saving this one into my favorites. The additional info. also muchly appreciated. I was thinking more "Harry Potter" when I was reading it, and now that I've read it a few times, the "religious content" really shines. I hope alot of people get to read this. Excellent stuff. Write on!

Answer 2

8.5 With some rework it would be a 9 plus. Well done.

Answer 3

this is very good. I could really imagine the scene. love it! keep writing!