I wrote this 4 my hmewrk, wot do u think??

Question

I am …

I am blissful and jubilant.
I wonder what I’ll look like when I’m older.
I hear enchanting, classical orchestral music.
I see light beaming from the heavens above, shining on me.
I want the power to fly and float through the unpolluted air.
I am blissful and jubilant.

I pretend to be a super hero.
I feel the wind whip against my face.
I touch my skin, wishing it was iron.
I worry about the innocent that don’t survive.
I cry when the wicked get away with their evil deeds.
I am blissful and jubilant.

I understand everyone is unique.
I say something without knowing its effect.
I dream of everything being perfect.
I try my best to be perfect.
I hope to be wise.
I am blissful and jubilant.

I'm 13, is this a good enough poem for my age level?

Answer 1

Hi, It is thoughtful and for your age it is a nice try at a poem. The more you write poetry, the better you will get to be. Perhaps there could be more rhyme or rhythm. I also wonder after your sentences like: "I worry about the innocent that don't survive" and "I cry when the wicked get away with their evil deeds" how can you still imply that you are blissful and jubilant? - Just a thought.

Polly

Answer 2

I worry about the innocent that don’t survive.

I cry when the wicked get away with their evil deeds.

I am blissful and jubilant.

this doesnt really fit well together,but other than that, i believe that it is very good for a person of any age.

Answer 3

This is NOT really a poem. Poetry follows a pattern and this isn't following anything. This is merely a bunch of words strung together. Poetry is imagery. It leads the mind and spirit. This is really not where it's at!

Answer 4

not a bad try.try to make ur words rhyme though

Answer 5

No. It doesn't even rhyme.

Here's a better poem. It rhymes:~

"Rosie's all atwitter,

She's scared as hell,

Trump's gonna git her,

And throw her down a well."



Thank you, thank you!

Answer 6

not bad.