What do you think of my newest poem?

Question

Check out my newest poem. Tell me what you think and also tell me if I should create a new website devoted to my poetry.

One sad night


If I would have known what would have happened that night
I would have never got ton into that mess
Drink after drink I said I would stop
But sadly I kept drinking
Person after Person I was told not to drive
Again, sadly I did not listen

Death is a very quick thing
You expect it to be slow and painful
But in reality it goes so fast; almost in one blink
The saddest part of the whole experience
Was that we lost Mom to a drunk driver
A drunk driver like me


I hope you like it! I don't know where this poem came from, I just felt like putting a message into one of my poems. Don't forget to comment about the website thing! Thanx!

Answer 1

really great poem! :)

Answer 2

this poem let me feel something really sad but at the same time there's a terrific message but Drunk Driving and you should really do the poetry website. It would be neat to to.

Answer 3

it's a great poem, with a great message

Answer 4

it's good! i love poetry that has a meaning behind it :)

Answer 5

Cool.



Could use a metaphor or two, though.