My Poem called "Sleepless Night" DO YOU LIKE IT?

Question

The day flashes quickly in front of my eyes,
as the sun sets peacefully as it begins into the night sky.
Withered pedals float softly to the ground
beginning to wonder, "What am I now?"
These voices I hear threaten my soul,
but somehow I can't let them go.
The fear of falling, the fear of dying,
leaves me alone in this one place called home.
I can't seem to grasp what I can feel,
I pinch myself, to make it is real.
The understanding of it all is all so crazy,
like a brand new half born baby.
The brown in my eyes reflect what I see,
a different vision of the picture called "Me."
The world around seems to sleep in peace,
though something inside of me, finally puts me to sleep.

Answer 1

It's pretty good. You should try writing more and you'll get much better at it.



Hope this helps.

Answer 2

good yeah



but i love my sleep



its vision me

Answer 3

Sorry but not really