Olease check and see whether this looks anything like iambic pentameter ??

Question

She was a woman with two little kids
She looked poor and wore a torn Shirt,
A black coat and a torn scarf around her neck.
She lost her husband in the big world war.
She has been struggling ever since that tragedy
poverty struck her hard and she looked skinny
She works in a nearby weaving company.
Her eyes looked extremely tired and worn out.
She took care of her two kids very well.
She knew their feelings, desires, dreams and hope
She pretended to be happy and patient.
She acted like everything was fine and okay
Behind her eyes I could see her sorrows.
She comes to most all the soups kitchens here.
So that her kids can eat something healthy.
Though she lost everything, she told me that
Her only hope is her kids and their future.

Answer 1

Here, I'll mark out the stresses of the first few lines where they fall most naturally:



SHE was a WOman with TWO little KIDS

She looked POOR and WORE a TORN SHIRT,

A BLACK COAT and a TORN SCARF aROUND her NECK.

She LOST her HUSband in the BIG WORLD WAR.



Not iambic pentameter at all. (an iamb goes da DA; in iambic pentameter, each line consists of five iambs)



It's not totally cut-and-dried: there are places where you could wiggle. For instance, you could read the first line "she WAS a WOman WITH two LITtle KIDS", which is iambic pentameter, although you have to stress the words a little differently than you probably would in conversation. But in other places, there's just no way to read it as iambic pentameter. For instance, line 2 doesn't even have 10 syllables.



Here's an attempt at rewriting the first few lines into iambic pentameter, to give you a feel for how it sounds.



She was a woman; had a pair of kids.

Was plainly poor: her shirt was thin and torn.

The scarf around her neck was torn as well.

She wore her husband's coat--he'd died at war.

Answer 2

Well you need 10 syllables per line, and it looks like you've mostly got it but read through again cuz on the last line you've got 11.



Is it Iambic? Hmm, man I hate meter.



I'm not sure to be honest - in places I am pretty sure it is but in others I don't think so -



remember you need the stress on the second syllable - 'Ti- Tum'

Answer 3

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Answer 4

this poem seems to be attempting iambic pentameter, but really doesn't qualify at all.

lines 1 and 4 are in iambic pentameter, but all the other lines either aren't ten syllables or aren't in iambic.

Answer 5

Unstressed followed by stressed.



You have to practise that before you can write a whole poem using the meter.



I would suggest reading Shakespearian sonnets.

Answer 6

A good trial made by you.You have started good, But diverted a bit.You will improve it nicely . Take it easy for those comments coming to you

Best trials you must IMPROVE ?

Answer 7

Wow that's really very nice poem. Its a very good try and i liked it.



10/10

Answer 8

not quite right.