ontological existentialism...a short free rhyme...c/c please?

Question

Ontological existentialism (we must learn)

an argument is ontologically imperative
to the nature of existential narrative
what comes fist is second to what must be
this has always been the foundation of philosophy

you say it is wrong, even just for now
though it answers both why and how
tell me later that I am mistaken
if only in use epistemology that is forsaken

an imperative of subtle nuance
requires context for each paradox
alas the things I can not compute and complete
are challenges the preceding generation are called meet

logical operands may be without bounds
but only if syntax remains a noun
reach beyond what it is you have heard
treat "syntacally" as yet a verb

we all can repent our sin of knowledge
if our limits we do acknowledge
stonewall not each relevant edification
upon the dearest of our education

embrace instead that which serves
the paradox of every verb

Answer 1

I make it a practice not to read 'ontological' anything on a Saturday, but I made an exception. lol, dunno about this. When I thought I had some meaning you contradicted yourself.

Answer 2

I also think this `tightly worked` yet `sweated over` is natural in presenting such diverse aspects of debate readable at all;

Perhaps though (?) , would it be possible to re-write, with some less abstruse-to-the-general-reader,

brief outlinings of the meanings of the terminologies used,

thus building from the relatively basic to the complex, then up to the acutely/chronically paradoxical, as summary/ apex?

This is I know, a tall order and you`re challenged by nuances of eschatological/ philosophical diversity.

But you can, I think, do it, if you let the fun of it, into this otherwise poetically assonant write.

Orl right?? :)

If/ when you`ve laid the basics more bare, d`you think that your talent with the rhyme can be re-apllied, due to your extensive vocabulary and clear awareness of the posited / assumed `theories` {sic} ?

I`d enjoy that, as well as I liked this one, however scambled it initially seems `presently` to be .

* 8/10*

Answer 3

Verse needs to scan; yours doesn't. The number of syllables in your couplets vary arbitrarily, and so do the accents. Decide on a syllabic and rhythmic scheme, and stick to it.



Rhyming verse needs to rhyme consistently. "Edification/education" and "knowledge/acknowledge" are identities posing as a rhyme, and neither do "nuance/paradox", "bounds/noun", "heard/verb", and "serves/verb" rhyme.



Diction in good verse is natural; yours is artificial, strained, and contorted.

Answer 4

Thoughts out of box? A paradox,

a way to turn spheres into blocks?

You dare go beyond squaring the circle,

making lightwaves ultra-purple.

Although pi is transcendental,

processes of complexity are experimental.

I still think you hold a clue

to something we don't believe could be true-

take these thoughts to the outer limits,

make the syntactal crunch- years into minutes.

You don't have to travel to cross time and space.

You just need new verbs to unentangle the trace...



That rules, in a vastly important way.

Answer 5

Nice to see you write!

Knowledge is power

Keep testing the water

Answer 6

Well placed rhyme.

I understood it, though it is not a favorite piece Ive ever seen from you.