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Question

I wrote this myself... explanation explains the deeper meanings
Replace (name) with your name if you wish...

Hey (name), I'm trying to make up for lost time
And (name), I don't mind
I'm at a loss for a sense of words
So what I'm trying to say is going to seem completely absurd;
But remember the story I told you I heard?
(Name), why the down look on your face
You know theres no one in this world that can try and replace
But suddenly this place is starting to feel the disgrace
But, (Name) LOOKUP cuz tomorrows another day
And by tomorrow ill finally know how to say
And we'll definately find things to turn out okay
Cuz theres no such thing as lost time

POEM EXPLANATION:
This poem is not suppose to be too formal
Just something you could send by email or myspace mail
This could be directly to someone that I may have not seen in a while and meeting up with that person again after that time. I say that theres no such thing as lost time at the end to transition the first line and have a close to the poem....
I present this poem with a situation and the last line is a conclusion statement.
I say in lines 3-5 that I don't know what to say now (after this time-- picking up where we left off without the time in between) but I say remember those things that I did say in the past (the stories)
I say "why the down look"
Then present a solution to it by saying (LOOKUP)
So I'm saying dont be sad, and lookup
I say "And by tom. ill finally know how to say" because I say at the beginning that "I'm at a loss for a sense of words"
So, I'm saying that i'll find the right words... I just know it...

So maybe a number rating out of 10 or any parts that you liked?

Answer 1

I'll print it out and use it as toilet paper.

Answer 2

Overall I would rate the poetry a 7/10. I liked the personal touch you give to the readers, and the fact it sounds like a semi-formal letter written with poetry attached to create the message (ypu wanted and if it was received as a email).

Answer 3

I liked it very much! I think that you should've chosen a name to put into the poem because it makes the poem seem to impersonal. Then later in the explanation you could've stated that you could change the name to whatever name you wanted. I give it a 7.

Answer 4

i liked it it was pretty good i would give it a 7 or an 8 if 10 is the good and 0 is bad :)

Answer 5

well i would give 8..

Answer 6

huh im lost i get it but cant really recommend it therefore dumb

Answer 7

wow i love it! i give it a 9!

Answer 8

that's a really good poem lol =)

Answer 9

thats really good!! :) 9-10!!!!!!!